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The graph below shows the number of university graduates in Canada from 1992 to 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of university graduates in Canada from 1992 to 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph depicts the number of male and female University graduates in Canada between 1992 and 2007.
Overall
, It clearly shows an increase in
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 population
than
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male
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the male
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.
Firstly
, in 1992 there was
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 female strength of around 100,000 slowly it had
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 significant rise in female students about 105,000 in 1995.
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 in
1998
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 it reached down to the initial number of students. And
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 2000 it started to surge upside and
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 a sum of 130,000 in the year 2005. And slowly it followed the rise for the
next
 consecutive years with almost 150,000 in 2007.
Secondly
, The male capacity at the beginning is less
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 70,000 in 1992, where it reaches
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 peak in 1995 with around 75,000.
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 it faced
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 dip in
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1998 and had an erratic nature
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until
 2001. From 2001 it had
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 moderate increase of masses making around 95,000
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male graduates by 2007.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slowly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • general trend
  • fluctuations
  • peaks
  • dips
  • significant differences
  • increase/decrease
  • comparison
  • data
  • period
  • economic conditions
  • policy changes
  • cultural shifts
  • implications
  • workforce
  • economy
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