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The graph below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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the given line graph compares the amount
og
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of
good
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goods
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 transported
ny
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by
road
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roads
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,
water
, rail and pipeline in the
uk
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UK
during
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from
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 1974 to 2002.
Overall
 ,the highest quantities of good
was
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were
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 shipped
via
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by
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road
whereas
 pipeline remained
tge
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the
 least commonly used mode of
transportation
 . As can be seen from the line
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the
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graph,70
milion
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million
tonnez
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tonnes
 of commodities were transported by
road
 in 1974 and
this quantities
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this quantity
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 increased to about 97
milion
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million
tonnez
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tonnes
at the end
 of
period
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the period
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 (2002),
while
pipeline
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the pipeline
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 started with 1
milion
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million
tonnes
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tonne
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 of goods in 1974.
This
 figure rose
20
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by 20
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milion
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million
tonnes
 of
good
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goods
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were
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delivered in the year 2002.
According to
 the given line graph,Rail and
water
 transported 40
milion
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million
tonnes
 of
commodies
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commodities
 in 1974 and
this
 quantity had some changes .In
details
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detail
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,the
amount
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number
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 of goods
were
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was
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 shipped via
water
 went up
about
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by about
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 62
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million
milion
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million
tonnes
 in 2002
while
 rail still
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maintained
mantained
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maintained
 the same figure
of
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as
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 the year 1974 (40
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million
milion
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million
tonnes
) before
had
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the
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a
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 decrease from 1986 to 1994 (35
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million
milion
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million
tonnes
 of goods) In conclusion,
road
transportation
 and
water
transportation
 carried more quantities than 2
transportation
 left.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words road, water, transportation, milion, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 7 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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