Some people believe that teenagers should focus on all school subjects, but other people believe that teenagers should focus on those subjects which are good or interesting.

There is split opinion regarding selection of
school
subjects.
Although
according to some people all
school
subjects should be focused by teenagers, other layman says that students should concentrate on some subjects which are
intreresting
arousing or holding the attention
interesting
. I
emphasise
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have emphasised
both approaches before making my final note in
this
essay. To commence with, there are
number
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a number
of ascendancy to learn all subjects. Most profound one is that children who can get some
knowledge
of all
school
subjects. To buttress view, if students obtain some information about all subjects,
then
they will perform well and secure admission in
good college
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a good college
,
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,
which is
essencial
absolutely necessary; vitally necessary
essential
for making good career. One more advantage is that they will give
good lesson
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a good lesson
to their children. To add, if people have good
knowledge
of all subjects,
then
they give good
knowledge
without
pay
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paying
extra money
of
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on
tution
a fee paid for instruction (especially for higher education)
tuition
classes to their children.
For example
,
India where
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India, where
almost all parents provide better
tution
a fee paid for instruction (especially for higher education)
tuition
at home to their children, because they have depth
knowledge
of all
school
subjects. Alternatively, along with all subjects, there are some supremacy of learning some
intresting
arousing or holding the attention
interesting
subjects.
First
and foremost, since pupils can more concentrate on
single
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a single subject
subject
without feel burden of other subjects, they will achieve mastery in
intresting
arousing or holding the attention
interesting
subjects. Without
feel
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feeling
burden student can spend more time with valuable subjects.
Therefore
, they can do deep research in limited subjects. Beside
this
, if
pupil
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the pupil
a pupil
have
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has
excellent
knowledge
regarding vital subjects,
then
they will not face
unemployment problem
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an unemployment problem
.
For instance
, 95% of the students had been achieved better job because of their mastery in
single
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single subjects
a single subject
subject
. Henceforth to conclude, by all
school
subjects, the students can secure deep
knowledge
and spread positive
knowledge
to their children,
although
single
subjects though
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subjects, though
which children can more focus on
subject
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the subject
and acquire mastery in
intresting
arousing or holding the attention
interesting
subject
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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