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This chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full-time or part-time.

This chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full-time or part-time.
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This
 chart shows the
number
 of men and women in
further
education
 in Britain in three periods and the
education
 could be categorized into two parts which are full-time
education
 and
part time
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part-time
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education
. The three periods differ ten years each and we could see the trend
of
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in
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this
 chart clearly that the
number
 of full-time
education
 in both
male
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males
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 and
female
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females
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 were increasing
in
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from
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 1970/71 to 1990/91
especially
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,especially
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in
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for
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female
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females
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. The
number
 of full-time
education
 in
female
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females
show examples
 rise up twice in 1980/81 when compares to 1970/71 in which
male
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males
show examples
 rise up gradually and constantly. On the other side, the
number
 of part-time
education
 is at least 4 times higher than full-time
education
. If we look deeply
in
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at
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female
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females
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, the
number
 swells
in
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apply
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every ten years
while
men
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aremen
weremen
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 quite flexible but it seems to
be lessen
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be lessened
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 from the first period, 1970/71. The average
number
 of part-time
education
 in
male
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males
show examples
 and
female
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females
show examples
 are in the same range even though they are not in the same trends but the
number
 of
female
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females
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 who takes part-time
education
 in 1990/91 rise up to the peak of all
education
. So what we can infer from
this
 chart is that
female
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females
show examples
 and
male
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males
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 tend to have higher
education
. Especially
in
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apply
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female
that
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apply
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nowadays
they
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apply
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have
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the rights
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rights
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right
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for
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to
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education
 and the
number
 who takes part in
education
 keeps increasing
in
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apply
show examples
every year.

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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 82%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, education with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 3 times.
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