"Fatherhood ought to be emphasised as much as motherhood. The idea that women are solely responsible for deciding whether or not to have babies leads on to the idea that they are also responsible for bringing the children up." To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Recently, the topic of bringing a
child
to
life
has been facing many difficulties. Fathers and mothers whom deciding to having a
baby
or not,
in addition
to that, many people think that the lead should taken by the women because they assume the fathers does not share babies needs. Women make all her efforts to raise a
baby
,
in addition
to that, they must decide to have a
child
or not because fatherhood is so busy and women should have a work not just
baby-sitter
a person engaged to care for children when the parents are not home
babysitters
.
First
of all, Mature husbands are so busy these days they work for hours every day to establish and provide supplies to his family
,
Accept space
,
due to that, taking care of an infant is not
husbads
concern.Example of that, the husband works most of the day he have no time to take care of his children,
that is
moms
Suggestion
man's
works
this
thought is wrong.
secondly
Suggestion
Secondly
, If a fetus come to
life
with a busy father and mother the
child
will be lonely
,
Accept space
,
some love should be counted
,
Accept space
,
because of that
moms
should determine having time for their children or not before bringing them to
life
. In fact, the pain of mothers during laying a
baby
is the hardest pain comes after burns.
mothers
a woman who has given birth to a child (also used as a term of address to your mother)
Mothers
should take
this
into
thier
of them or themselves
their
consideration.Having
life
with a
baby
is difficult to most
moms
any warm-blooded vertebrate having the skin more or less covered with hair; young are born alive except for the small subclass of monotremes and nourished with milk
mammals
in the world; the time of her relaxation is decreased, not only that, but
also
, the chance of having a good job while having a
baby
is difficult because of many companies refuse
moms
CVs when they observe them having a little
child
, the assume babies make them not focusing on tasks.
Finally
,
moms
should determine having a
baby
or not because they will work against the clock in their
life
to make sure
thier
of them or themselves
their
babies be in good health. Fathers should pay more attention to
thier
of them or themselves
their
babies not throw all the responsibility to
thier
of them or themselves
their
wives.
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