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"Fatherhood ought to be emphasised as much as motherhood. The idea that women are solely responsible for deciding whether or not to have babies leads on to the idea that they are also responsible for bringing the children up." To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Recently, the topic of bringing a
child
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 to
life
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 has been facing many difficulties. Fathers and mothers whom deciding to having a
baby
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 or not,
in addition
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 to that, many people think that the lead should taken by the women because they assume the fathers does not share babies needs. Women make all her efforts to raise a
baby
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,
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 to that, they must decide to have a
child
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 or not because fatherhood is so busy and women should have a work not just
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baby-sitter
a person engaged to care for children when the parents are not home
babysitters
.
First
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 of all, Mature husbands are so busy these days they work for hours every day to establish and provide supplies to his family
,
Accept space
,
due to that, taking care of an infant is not
husbads
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 concern.Example of that, the husband works most of the day he have no time to take care of his children,
that is
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moms
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man's
 works
this
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 thought is wrong.
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secondly
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Secondly
, If a fetus come to
life
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 with a busy father and mother the
child
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 will be lonely
,
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,
some love should be counted
,
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,
because of that
moms
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 should determine having time for their children or not before bringing them to
life
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. In fact, the pain of mothers during laying a
baby
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 is the hardest pain comes after burns.
mothers
a woman who has given birth to a child (also used as a term of address to your mother)
Mothers
 should take
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 into
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thier
of them or themselves
their
 consideration.Having
life
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 with a
baby
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 is difficult to most
moms
any warm-blooded vertebrate having the skin more or less covered with hair; young are born alive except for the small subclass of monotremes and nourished with milk
mammals
 in the world; the time of her relaxation is decreased, not only that, but
also
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, the chance of having a good job while having a
baby
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 is difficult because of many companies refuse
moms
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 CVs when they observe them having a little
child
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, the assume babies make them not focusing on tasks.
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,
moms
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 should determine having a
baby
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 or not because they will work against the clock in their
life
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 to make sure
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thier
of them or themselves
their
 babies be in good health. Fathers should pay more attention to
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thier
of them or themselves
their
 babies not throw all the responsibility to
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thier
of them or themselves
their
 wives.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • 1. Equal Parenting
  • 2. Gender Roles
  • 3. Societal Expectations
  • 4. Emotional Well-being
  • 5. Psychological Development
  • 6. Legal Frameworks
  • 7. Workplace Policies
  • 8. Gender Equality
  • 9. Traditional Responsibilities
  • 10. Active Fatherhood
  • 11. Balanced Development
  • 12. Undue Burden
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