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In schools and universities, girls tend to choose arts while boys like science. What are the reasons for this trend and do you think this tendency should be changed?

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In school and universities, girls tend to choose arts while boys like
science
. I think it's quite natural. We live in the 21st century and it is no secret that everyone has the freedom to choose. If we start
on
Suggestion
with
 statistics, it is clear that most
girls love
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girls, love
 art, and most boys -
science
, but it does not negate the fact, that girls can study
science
, and guys
on the contrary
 - art. When I was in school, I had a classmate, her name was Anya and she always had bad grades from drawing and music, but she always got good grades with biology, chemistry, algebra, geometry and geography. I
also
 have a friend Max, we went to different schools, but I always helped him with homework, as he was given trumpet point sciences
such
 as mathematics, but Max had a wonderful voice, since childhood he went to courses on vocals and videos on which he sings always was popular on social networks. But these are only isolated examples, mostly all my peers and I
also
 follow the trend about which is written above. I think it's quite normal, and I think it would be even a little strange if it were the other way around. I believe that nothing should be changed and still leave the freedom to choose for the children. Having
such
 freedom of choice as now, a person can decide for himself what he wants to do,
science
 or culture, regardless of his gender.
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