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the growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing. do you agree or disagree.

#growth #shops #towns #cities
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Nowadays the lifestyle of the people is different. Many people feel uncomfortable and time consuming for going crowded markets. So, e-shopping
become
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becomes
 more popular which create a belief of a mass bankruptcy for shopkeepers in
near future
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the near future
.
However
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, it should be noted that online shopping is only an option for sellers of goods and services, not a termination button. The growth of technology has allowed people to try new ways of shopping. E-commerce websites became a trend among today’s young generation.
This
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 gives them the opportunity to visit more virtual stores in less time and buy what they are looking for. In contrary,
this
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 style of purchasing is not popular among many groups of people, including the elderly. Traditional buyers believe that they should be able to experience the products they want to buy before paying for them to be sure they choose the right one, especially those that are expensive. Which one is more important when you want to buy a new perfume, the minutes you spend in the store or making sure about
it’s
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
 scent?
Moreover
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, the lack of trust that people still have on online stores is another vital point by which the shops still benefit from having face-to-face customers. Shopping is something more than meeting needs.
Although
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 people go to the market and shops to buy what they need, it is somehow
helps
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helping
 them to feel more satisfied with their lives. In recent years, whenever
Apple company
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an Apple company
the Apple company
 launches a new smartphone, their customers have been waiting in long queues for hours to buy it.
This
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people
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person
enjoy
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enjoys
this
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 waiting time, because they want to be in the
first
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 group who own that new product, even though they could purchase it on the web.
Furthermore
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, shopping is an amusement itself.
In other words
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, many people, especially women, only want to go out in shopping malls for the sake of window shopping in order to satisfy themselves which is undoubtedly impossible through the Internet. Despite the fact that online shopping has found a significant place for
itself
the thing named or in question
it
, but it is not a threat to the traditional stores and malls.
This
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 is mainly because many people still prefer to look closely at what they want to buy based on their instincts to have more satisfaction and they like to enjoy other opportunities they face while they are in the malls.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar
  • physical stores
  • online retailers
  • retail apocalypse
  • digital economy
  • consumer behavior
  • sustainability
  • commercial landscape
  • high-street
  • consumer trends
  • augmented reality
  • showrooms
  • carbon footprint
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