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The graph below shows the amount of goods transported in the UK from 1974 to 2002.

The graph below shows the amount of goods transported in the UK from 1974 to 2002.
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The graph illustrates the
amount
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 of
goods
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 transported through four networks(road, rail, water, pipeline) between 1974 and 2002 in the UK.
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, roadways were the most used means of transport
whereas
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 the pipeline was the least used transportation means during the entire period.
Although
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 water and rail transported almost the same amount of
goods
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 at the beginning, after 1974 the former experienced a rise
while
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 the latter saw a decline in
usage
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. Roads were the most used transportation methods during the entire period studied. Around 70
million
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tonnes
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 of
goods
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 were transported in 1974.
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,
post 1978
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 the
usage
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 fluctuated before rising again steadily after 1995 and
finally
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 settling at around 99
million
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tonnes
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 of
goods
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 transported in 2002.
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, the pipeline was the least used mode of transport of all the categories during the period studied with roughly 2
million
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tonnes
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 supplied in 1974, but the numbers rose gradually to 22
million
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tonnes
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 in 2002. With regards to water and rail, both the transportation modes transported almost similar amount of items in 1974 (around 39 and 40
million
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tonnes
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 respectively).
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,
post 1978
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, the former saw an increase in
usage
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 with the figures increasing by 23
million
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tonnes
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whereas
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 the latter's
usage
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 reduced and fluctuated until 1995, before increasing again to around 41
million
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tonnes
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 by 2002.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, whereas".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words goods, usage, million, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "amount" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • amount
  • transported
  • UK
  • increased
  • significantly
  • 28-year period
  • first decade
  • steady increase
  • significant jump
  • highest point
  • gradual decline
  • minor increase
  • dropped
  • similar level
  • goods
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