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The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the samepark today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The maps compare the layout of a public
park
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 called
Grane
a relatively small granular particle of a substance
grain
Greene
crane
 in its opening year 1920 and as it is now. It is clear that apart from the rose
garden
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 in the Northwest and the two entrances, the rest of the
park
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’s features
has been
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have been
 completely replaced. Both in the two maps, visitors can access
Grane
of the color between blue and yellow in the color spectrum; similar to the color of fresh grass
green
grange
grant
park
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 either through the entrance on the Arnold Avenue side or the one on the Eldon street side.
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, a new underground parking area has been built, which can be approached through the entrance on the East side. Of the three rose
garderns
a plot of ground where plants are cultivated
gardens
 in 1920, only the
garden
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on
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in
 the Northwest remains unchanged. Major transformations can be seen in other features.
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, in the middle of the
park
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, a large rose
garden
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 has been grown on the place where the fountain was previously placed.
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 to
this
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, seats were organized around four sides of the
garden
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instead
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 of being allocated at different corners of the
park
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.
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, major changes include the conversion of the musicians’ stage into an amphitheatre with greater capacity, the replacement of the glass house by the water feature, and the development of a playground for children.
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