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To improve the quality of education, some people think that we should encourage our students to evaluate and criticise their teachers. Other believe that this will result in loss of respect and discipline in the classroom. Discuss both views and give you opinion.

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Education is the main part to build countries, economics and minds. So to improve
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 the quality of education there are many steps. These steps can be summarized in understanding
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 needs of the students for the education they are getting and what is the benefits of each subject the are studying in schools, colleges and institutes. We should know
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 if these subjects will help me in my practical life and my field of work or not? After I can understand what the students needs to improve
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 skills to be able for competition in the market of work.
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 it is showing non respect from the students to evaluate
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teachers but
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teachers, but
 it is
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a very important side
 to show the needs of the students to be excellent in
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 results and researches, so these will be
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an important point
important points
 to show flexibility between teachers and students for improving the education and reaching to the needs of
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the world
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