The diagram shows the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram shows the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The two diagrams illustrate the way in which
cement
is made and
then
used for construction.
Overall
, limestone and clay go through several steps before
bagged
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but only 15% of
cement
,
accordingly
, is used for producing concrete. In the first diagram, limestone and clay are crushed into a smooth powder. After the power goes through a mixer, it is led through a tube into a rotating heater. The mixture,
hence
, is heated by a fierce fire. After melting, the mixture is ground into
cement
and
thus
being
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packaged before being transported to building
constructions
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. In the process of producing concrete, it is indicated that concrete consists of a huge amount of gravel (50%), which are small stones. Other ingredients are sand,
cement
and water, which is 25%, 15% and 10% respectively. These ingredients are all poured into a rotating machine
in
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which produces concrete mixers for building purposes. In conclusion,
although
the process of
cement
-making undergoes many steps, the way of producing concrete is less complicated.
While
complex equipment is used to produce
cement
, concrete-making needs fewer tools.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words cement with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • raw materials
  • ground into a powder
  • rotating heater
  • clinker
  • packaged in bags
  • concrete production
  • specified proportions
  • concrete mixer
  • building purposes
  • blended
  • limestone
  • clay
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