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In some cites and towns all over the world ,the high volume of traffic is a problem.what are the causes of this and what actions can be taken to solve this problem?

#towns #world #volume #traffic #actions
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In
this
 and age
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traffic
has being became
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became
has been became
is becoming
has become
becomes
was becoming
 a controversial issue as it spread globally. Due to
this
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people endure many obstacles
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So,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 intend to explore the source of
this
 problem along with some viable solutions to it
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 To regard with some possible factors of
this
 trend.
Firstly
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In
earlier time
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earlier times
an earlier time
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 people used to less
transportion
a facility consisting of the means and equipment necessary for the movement of passengers or goods
transportation
transpiration
transition
 services and they covered long and short distance through domestic animals
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sometimes by walking as well.Whereas
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,
thesedays
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these days
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,
 everyone has their private
vechicles
a conveyance that transports people or objects
vehicles
 and they
reliable
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reliably
 on it for moving
farway
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far-away
 and nearest destination.
Thus
,
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,
this
 practice act as promote
traffic
 level on roads.One
further
 point is that
public
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the public transportation system
transportation
 system is less effective because human beings does not reach at their
locatin
a point or extent in space
location
locations
 on time as a consequence, they have to use private
vechicles
a conveyance that transports people or objects
vehicles
 which leads to
traffic
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 Another reason is behind that many people who travel rural areas to urban areas for obtaining education
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work
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,
medical services
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,
which helps to increase
traffic
 because they
also
 use private
vechiles
a conveyance that transports people or objects
vehicles
instead
 of public
transportation
. Moving
further
 with possible action in the favour of address
this
 practice
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 Primary and strong action should be taken by government is that
authorities
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the authorities
 provide extra and improve public
transportation
 facilities in order to reduce private
vechicle
a conveyance that transports people or objects
vehicle
 on
roads
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the roads
alongwith
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along with
 encourage people use public
transportation
 and spread
awerness
having knowledge of
awareness
reagarding
with regard or relation to
regarding
 health issues which may be
occured
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occurring
occurred
 in
future
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the future
 due to
traffic
.
Moreover
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,
companies should allow cab for their
employess
a worker who is hired to perform a job
employees
employers
 and people must walk for short distance which may help reduce
traffic level
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traffic levels
the traffic level
. In conclusion
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i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 reiterate that
traffic
 has very
diverese
many and different
diverse
 outcomes like increase accident rate
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,
 pollution
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,
health problems.
Therefore
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,
government
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the government
 and humanity can be reduced it with
consicious
intentionally conceived
conscious
 steps.

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