These days many families move to other countries for work. Some people believe that the children in these families benefit from this move. However, others believe that it makes life more difficult for the children. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

In
this
modern era, migration is
very common thing
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a very common thing
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having few parts; not complex or complicated or involved
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people have mentally which is
that is
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that, is
it really good for the children of those families who migrate to other countries
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But still some people have opposite mentality
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In my opinion, I believe that when family migrate it really good for their
childrens
a young person of either sex
children
.
Moreover
, when families
moves
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move
one to other
countries it
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countries, it
will affect on the
childrens
a young person of either sex
children
children's
of those families on both ways like good and
bed
that which is below standard or expectations as of ethics or decency
bad
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Because every coin has two
side
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sides
" one is positive and other is
nagetative
characterized by or displaying negation or denial or opposition or resistance; having no positive features
negative
". When children move to
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
coontry
a politically organized body of people under a single government
country
countries
with
family he
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the family, he
the family he
Learn menu new things like different culture and many other things
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Children
also
learn how to make new friends And how to adjust
with
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to
new people and
this
is really good for them because those are the basic fundamentals of like
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when
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When
children see the other
cultur
a particular society at a particular time and place
cultures
around
everywhere
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everywhere, then
then
he or she can easily understand the value of their own culture.
In addition
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there is
also
some negative effect
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Because when children move to
new country
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a new country
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sometimes children is not adjust with others and in many cases
child
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children
get free hands
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So child will start smoking and drinking. In 2009 government research shows that 30 percentage of children of
migrate
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migrating
families are starting bed
habities
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hobbits'
habits
in underage
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Because of bed company. When families
migrate
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migrated
at that time they are busy
in
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with
other
nacessary
absolutely essential
necessary
unnecessary
things
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Due to
this
they can't give proper time to their children and it's major drawback for children
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To conclude
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children of
migrate
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migrating
families get more
benifet
financial assistance in time of need
benefits
as
compare
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compared
to less drawback due to migration. It is really good for the society.

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