These days many families move to other countries for work. Some people believe that the children in these families benefit from this move. However, others believe that it makes life more difficult for the children. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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modern era, migration is

very common thing

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a very common thing

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having few parts; not complex or complicated or involved

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people have mentally which is

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that is

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that, is

it really good for the children of those families who migrate to other countries

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But still some people have opposite mentality

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In my opinion, I believe that when family migrate it really good for their

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a young person of either sex

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, when families

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move

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countries, it

will affect on the

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a young person of either sex

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of those families on both ways like good and

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that which is below standard or expectations as of ethics or decency

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Because every coin has two

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characterized by or displaying negation or denial or opposition or resistance; having no positive features

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any of various alternatives; some other

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a politically organized body of people under a single government

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the family, he

the family he

Learn menu new things like different culture and many other things

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Children

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learn how to make new friends And how to adjust

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new people and

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is really good for them because those are the basic fundamentals of like

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children see the other

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around

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everywhere, then

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he or she can easily understand the value of their own culture.

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there is

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some negative effect

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Because when children move to

new country

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a new country

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sometimes children is not adjust with others and in many cases

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children

get free hands

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So child will start smoking and drinking. In 2009 government research shows that 30 percentage of children of

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Because of bed company. When families

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with

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absolutely essential

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Due to

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they can't give proper time to their children and it's major drawback for children

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children of

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migrating

families get more

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financial assistance in time of need

benefits

compare

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compared

to less drawback due to migration. It is really good for the society.

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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