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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Most of us believed that bad situations
happens
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happen
 for a reason. We need to accept
such
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 things in
order
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 for us to move forward and go on with our lives. But for some, bad situations are meant to happen in
order
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 for us to see the things that we might lack and
gives
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give
 us the chance to improve our current
situation
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. During our childhood years, We tend to make a lot of mistakes and do silly things, which is normal since we are still playful and curious the environment that we are in. Like choosing to play video games
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 of doing our home works. Choosing to play
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 of studying place us in a bad
situation
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 which is having a failing grade. But as we experience
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 kind of
situation
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, we learn to balance our time in
order
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 for us to do the things that we need and that
things
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thing
 that makes us happy. We improve our time management and developed our sense of responsibility. As we grow older, we are placed in many kinds of situations, which includes the bad ones.
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 as being rejected by someone that we really admire and love. Being fired out from work. Learning to accept
this
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 kind of situations and knowing that it is normal and inevitable, makes us tougher, mature and stronger individual. Failure, mistakes and bad decisions are part of our
lives
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life
. As much as we want to avoid being
place
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placed
 in a bad
situation
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, we need to know that it is very essential for us. We need to experience these in
order
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 for us to be aware of our imperfections and make a better life decisions in the future.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adversity
  • resilience
  • stoicism
  • contentment
  • cope
  • adapt
  • endure
  • persevere
  • settle
  • ambition
  • tenacious
  • determined
  • resourceful
  • optimistic
  • self-improvement
  • proactive
  • initiative
  • transform
  • overcome
  • confront
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