The chart below gives the information on the percentage of British people giving money to charity by age range for the years 1990 and 2010.

The chart below gives the information on the percentage of British people giving money to charity by age range for the years 1990 and 2010.
The bar chart compares
British
people
of five different ages for the
years
1990 and 2010 in terms of the
proportion
of
people
who devoted their
money
to
charity
.
Overall
,
it is clear that
a percentage of
British
people
gave more
money
to
charity
in 1990 than they did in 2010.
In addition
, elder
people
donated more
for
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charity
than
younger
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their younger
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counterparts. About over 15
percent
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per cent
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of
people
aged from 18 to 25
years
old in 1990 donated to
charity
,
whereas
around 17
percent
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per cent
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of those in 2010. The
proportion
of
people
who
was
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were
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50
years
old and below spent more
money
for
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on
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charity
in 1990 than they did in 2010. The
British
aged 50 and younger in 1999 spent more
money
on
charity
than those in 2010. The percentage of
people
between 36 and 50
years
of
age
in 1999 was the highest during
this
period, which accounted for above 40
percent
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per cent
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.
By contrast
, the figure for the youngest
people
in 2010 was the lowest, at over 5
percent
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per cent
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. The
proportion
of
British
people
after the
age
of 51
years
old decreased slightly
their
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in their
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donation to
charity
between 1999 and 2010. The percentage of
people
who
was
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were
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51 and above in 1999 declined by under 5
percent
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per cent
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(35
percent
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per cent
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of the
second
oldest
group
and about 32
percent
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per cent
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of the oldest
age
group
). The figure for
people
in the 51-65
age
group
was exactly 35
percent
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per cent
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in 1999, compared to over 30
percent
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per cent
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of the
65 plus
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65-plus
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age
group
. The
proportion
for
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of
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people
between 51
years
old and above in 1990 was lower than the figure for those in 2010.
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