The chart below gives the information on the percentage of British people giving money to charity by age range for the years 1990 and 2010.

The chart below gives the information on the percentage of British people giving money to charity by age range for the years 1990 and 2010.
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The bar chart compares
British
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people
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of five different ages for the
years
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1990 and 2010 in terms of the
proportion
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of
people
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who devoted their
money
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to
charity
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.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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a percentage of
British
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people
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gave more
money
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to
charity
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in 1990 than they did in 2010.
In addition
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, elder
people
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donated more
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charity
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than
younger
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their younger
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counterparts. About over 15
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percent
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of
people
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aged from 18 to 25
years
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old in 1990 donated to
charity
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,
whereas
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around 17
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percent
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per cent
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of those in 2010. The
proportion
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of
people
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who
was
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50
years
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old and below spent more
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for
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on
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charity
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in 1990 than they did in 2010. The
British
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aged 50 and younger in 1999 spent more
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on
charity
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than those in 2010. The percentage of
people
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between 36 and 50
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of
age
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in 1999 was the highest during
this
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period, which accounted for above 40
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percent
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.
By contrast
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, the figure for the youngest
people
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in 2010 was the lowest, at over 5
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percent
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. The
proportion
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of
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people
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after the
age
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of 51
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old decreased slightly
their
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donation to
charity
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between 1999 and 2010. The percentage of
people
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who
was
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were
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51 and above in 1999 declined by under 5
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percent
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per cent
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(35
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percent
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per cent
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of the
second
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oldest
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and about 32
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percent
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per cent
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of the oldest
age
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group
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). The figure for
people
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in the 51-65
age
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group
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was exactly 35
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percent
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per cent
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in 1999, compared to over 30
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percent
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of the
65 plus
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age
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group
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. The
proportion
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for
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of
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people
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between 51
years
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old and above in 1990 was lower than the figure for those in 2010.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words british, people, years, proportion, money, charity, percent, age, group with synonyms.
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