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Today much of the food people eat gets transported from farms that are thousands of miles away. Some people believe it would be better for the environment and the economy if people only consumed food produced by local farmers. Would the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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The representation of bar layout delineates the different ways to combat the problem of
waste
 in various nations.
Firstly
, nearly 68% of ratio of
waste
 was recycled in the Netherlands and followed by
second highest proportion
Suggestion
the second highest proportion
 of 20% of
misuse
 utilised in Italy.
However
,
misuse
 was again used in Spain and UK with least ratio, as accounted as nearly 11% and 12% respectively.
Further
, in Italy and Spain,
misuse
 was used as chemicals with equal proportion, as observed as near 18%. Whereas, the lowest amount of
waste
 was utilised in Netherland and UK, as lucid as 135 and 17% respectively. Probing
further
, 30% of
waste
 was burnt by Spain.
Moreover
, 22% of the ratio was recorded by burnt
misuse
 in Italy.
However
, in the UK and Netherland, only 4% and 10% of garbage was dismissed in the fire. Moving toward to landfill method.
This
 source was highly used in the UK as 68%, followed by Italy and Spain, as observed as 4%, but in Netherland, just 8% of
waste
 was landfill. Overall, it is apparent that source of landfill was used by majority of countries, but the method of burnt
misuse
 was not much used by nations,
instead
 of Spain.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • carbon emissions
  • carbon footprint
  • local economy
  • food security
  • supply chain disruptions
  • cultural heritage
  • farming practices
  • nutritional value
  • local food systems
  • imported goods
  • economies of scale
  • environmental benefits
  • transportation
  • community support
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