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Do the dangers derived from the use of chemicals in food production and preservation outweigh the advantages?

#dangers #chemicals #food #production #preservation
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The modernization in
world many
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world, many
 foods that are
sefed
rescued; especially from the power and consequences of sin
saved
 in
barn
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the barn
a barn
barns
 and supermarket stores by chemical method. The foods are
gone
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going
 to
longer
remain present although waning or gradually dying
linger
 into time through chemical.
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First
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 of all,
this
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 is
true method
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the true method
a true method
 of foods are
keeped
(especially of promises or contracts) not violated or disregarded
kept
 more time in
store-rooms
a room in which things are stored
storerooms
streams
storerooms'
. In my view, that things responsible humans are
refresh
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refreshed
refreshing
 of foods
becouse
for the reason that; on account of
because
 before it foods don't happen danger
for
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to
health
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. Many scientists advise
in
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on
safe natural
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safe, natural
 with way van things
that is
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 better for nutritious in barns. And nowadays every people purchase from supermarkets per things. The supermarkets are
replied
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replying
 to qualities every sold for things. I think if foods used with chemicals in kinds, they will increase more dangers
for
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For
people
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peoples'
peoples
health
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.
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, the chemical in methods of
foods use
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foods, use
at
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in
 production and preservation, it is clear more
benifats
financial assistance in time of need
benefits
 to companies for income. But
this
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 is effected people's impact more and more their
health
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 and so on the chemical to productions
adicted
compulsively or physiologically dependent on something habit-forming
addicted
 to artificial to foods.
This
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 is very
dangers
involving or causing danger or risk; liable to hurt or harm
dangerous
 to customers for received. Today
this
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 method is caused
reborted
made known or told about; especially presented in a formal account
reported
 by
press
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the press
 and becoming
issue
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an issue
 to people. To sum up, the chemicals are used in way to foods
this
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 is more
dangers
involving or causing danger or risk; liable to hurt or harm
dangerous
 for
people
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peoples'
peoples
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health but
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health, but
 it is
benifats
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benefiting
benefits
 to producers,
therefore
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this
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 is
way
Suggestion
a way
 for
dangers
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the dangers
 it is denied by government.
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