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Climate change is a big environmental problem that has become critical in last couple of decades. Some people claim that humans should stop burning fossil fuels and use only alternative energy resources, such as wind and solar power. Others say that oil, gas and coal are essential for many industries, and not using them will lead to economic collapse.

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petrol
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gas and many more that.
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every day; without missing a day
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dearly
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proceed somewhere despite the risk of possible dangers
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people in general
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the system of production and distribution and consumption
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be contingent upon (something that is elided)
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an essential thing
essential thing
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use
are using
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relating to or derived from the sun or utilizing the energies of the sun
solar
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it's
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used
using
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the long term
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manufactures
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as an example
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a car
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metro cities
a metro city
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(physics) a thermodynamic quantity equivalent to the capacity of a physical system to do work; the units of energy are joules or ergs
energy
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someone who commits capital in order to gain financial returns
investor
inventor
innovator
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have the quality of being; (copula, used with an adjective or a predicate noun)
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successful
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to a very great extent or degree
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can not
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goes
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an
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to a very great extent or degree
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(physics) a thermodynamic quantity equivalent to the capacity of a physical system to do work; the units of energy are joules or ergs
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depends
depend
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the sun
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for
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refers to the speaker or writer
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work done by one person or group that benefits another
service
survive
survived
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to a very great extent or degree
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work done by one person or group that benefits another
service
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be contingent upon (something that is elided)
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depends
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