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Climate change is a big environmental problem that has become critical in last couple of decades. Some people claim that humans should stop burning fossil fuels and use only alternative energy resources, such as wind and solar power. Others say that oil, gas and coal are essential for many industries, and not using them will lead to economic collapse.

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Introduction
As per my opinion, No need to claim
on
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for
 essential things like oil
,
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,
petrol
,
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,
gas and many more that.
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 know that large amount of that things harm for
us but
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us, but
 it is ore
daliy
every day; without missing a day
daily
dearly
 need
.
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.
 In 21th
centure
proceed somewhere despite the risk of possible dangers
venture
centre
censure
 everyone required that
thai
people in general
they
the
this
 and our
econmic
the system of production and distribution and consumption
economy
also
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dedpened
be contingent upon (something that is elided)
depend
 on it.
Body paragraph 1
In metro city
,
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,
 it is
essentail thing
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an essential thing
essential thing
 if we
are
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use
are using
use
Use synonyms
such
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solor
relating to or derived from the sun or utilizing the energies of the sun
solar
 power engines
,
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,
its
it is
it's
 not
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use
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used
using
 long terms.
in
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In
 short terms we can
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use but
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use, but
 in
long term
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the long term
 we can
use
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 it. There are many
manufacture
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manufactures
 companies for
oil gas
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oil, gas
 and coal.
Body paragraph 2
MNC companies work on it
.
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.
There
are
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is
 ample amount of people working.
Body paragraph 3
For
eg
as an example
e.g.
, Nowadays everyone have a big house and
car
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a car
 and stay in
metro city
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metro cities
a metro city
.
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.
if
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If
 they
are you
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are, you
 solar
enery
(physics) a thermodynamic quantity equivalent to the capacity of a physical system to do work; the units of energy are joules or ergs
energy
invetor
someone who commits capital in order to gain financial returns
investor
inventor
innovator
,
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,
 it
ia
have the quality of being; (copula, used with an adjective or a predicate noun)
is
 not
sucussfully
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successful
successfully
 because if people depend on it its not work whole day
.
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.
so
to a very great extent or degree
So
, we
can;t
can not
can't
 stop burning fossil fuel
.
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.
everyone
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Everyone
go
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goes
 one city to another in
car
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the car
a car
cars
,
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,
 they need
a
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an
 oil
.
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.
so
to a very great extent or degree
So
 we have need that thing in daily basis.
Conclusion
Solar
enery
(physics) a thermodynamic quantity equivalent to the capacity of a physical system to do work; the units of energy are joules or ergs
energy
depnend
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depends
depend
 on
sun
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the sun
, they can charge
on
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for
 12 hours
,
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,
 we can
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
servive
work done by one person or group that benefits another
service
survive
survived
 in 2-3 day in that much changes.
and
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And
 in rainy day what is their alternate.
so
to a very great extent or degree
So
 we
can;y
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servive
work done by one person or group that benefits another
service
 on
depened
be contingent upon (something that is elided)
depend
depends
 on solar energy
.
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.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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