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The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The maps compare
road
 access to a hospital in the 3-year period from 2007 to 2010 which was changed with the reconstruction of the main
road
. As
it
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can be seen on the first map, there was one main
road
 (Hospital
road
) leading straight to the city hospital. On the right hand of
this
road
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 there was a car park for both staff and
public
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the public
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 in 2007. On the left hand of the Hospital
road
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,road
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 there was nothing back in 2007
comparing
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 with a bus station in 2010. Looking more closely at the maps, we can see that the Hospital
road
 was changed in 2010 by
building
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of
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two roundabouts which were connected with the bus station. One of them was at the cross of the Ring
road
 and the Hospital
road
 in the North. The other one was at the cross of the City
road
 and the Hospital
road
 in the South. The parking area to the East of the main
road
 did not change
it's
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 location but
this
 car park
transformed
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 for staff only. Whilst the public could leave their automobiles on
a
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new parking to the East of the city hospital.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words road with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • traffic flow
  • road access
  • ring road
  • bus stops
  • bus station
  • congestion
  • parking facilities
  • pedestrian crossings
  • vehicular flow
  • organizational structure
  • accessibility
  • enhancements
  • configuration
  • dedicated
  • diverting traffic
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