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The position of women has changed a great deal in many societies over the past 50 years. But these societies cannot claim to have achieved gender equality. to what extent do you agree or disagree?

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For the past 50 years, an uncountable amount of effort has been given to change the position of women in the society, yearning for
gender
 equality.
Although
this
 effort has greatly changed the outlook on the
gender
 group, many are unable to say that
gender
 equality has been achieved. Personally, I
also
 find
this
 to be true. The reason for which will be
further
 explained within the essay, and followed by a conclusion pulled from the discussion. Despite it being true that more and more women are working and earning status and work used to be exclusive to men. Women are still handicapped in a multitude of ways. One of the biggest examples is the
gender
 pay gap, where women are earning less in comparison to men for the exact same quantity of work.
Unfortunately
Accept comma addition
Unfortunately, this
this
 is true for plenty of employer all throughout the world, and it is currently something that the working population are petitioning to fix Another evidence of inequality is where companies prefer employing men over women. The reason for which is that men do not have the responsibility that women have,
such
 as taking care of the home as well as their children.
Therefore
, in the firm’s view men are more focused towards the job and
thus
 are more efficient than women.

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