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Completing university education is thought by some to be best way to get a job.On the other hand,other people think that getting experience and developing soft-skills is more important. Discuss both sides and give your opinion?

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Some people consider that getting higher
education
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 is great to get a good
job
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,
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, others think having experience and working on enhancing their skills can help. In my opinion, I believe having a
university
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education
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 always gives you an edge,
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, it depends on the
job
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 requirements, and does it need soft skills or
university
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education
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. Having
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university
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a university education
education
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 keeps us ahead in many
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 profiles, where it is an essential criterion,
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, a
job
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 for the position of a professor, scientist, lawyers or any special branch for doctors. These are all professions which need a
university
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education
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. Higher
education
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 means more knowledge about a particular field so can be used for expertise. There are always many more
job
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 opportunities which emphasize on
university
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education
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. I believe having a
university
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education
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 opens a lot more doors for jobs.
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, people having experience and skills are hired very often. These experienced candidates have the knowledge which is useful for many in their fields, sometimes they are offered better positions and salaries than others.
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, in business, management and advertisements they should be good at communication skills rather than having a tertiary
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. In many countries they have special categories of skilled people and a lot more scope. Companies often hire skilled and experienced people to lead their teams
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 of younger people who have a higher
education
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 background because they are best in their field and have a lot of exposure to pressure related situation.
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, I believe that higher
education
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 is the key in getting a good
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job but
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job, but
 having great skills and experience can
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 lead to a great career. So both the factors can be important, but depend upon the
job
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 requirements and responsibilities.
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