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The chart below gives information on the global sale of hybrid vehicles between 2006 and 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The chart below gives information on the global sale of hybrid vehicles between 2006 and 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
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The graph compares the number of hybrid vehicle
sales
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 during a 4-year period in three geographical areas. As can be seen from the graph, the data on total
sales
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 in 2009 were twice as many as the number in 2006 as the level of all transport
sales
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 increased through distinctive patterns during the 4-year period. In the year 2006, the greatest proportion of
selling
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 belonged to the United States in which vehicles were bought 250.000 on record
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 the figure in Japan and other countries shared the same number of
sales
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 at somewhere in the vicinity of 50,000 hybrid transports.
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 the US
Sales
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 trend fluctuated over the following two years, it remained the highest figure which stayed at 300 thousand, compared to both Japan and the others with about 100 thousand
of
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in
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sales
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.
Afterward
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, the commerce of transportation in the US fell to fewer than 300.000 in 2019 when the statistic in Japan rocketed to 350.000
and
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which
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 was the highest figure compared to the US and
other
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others
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 which only rose by approximately 10.000
sales
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Linking words: Add more linking words.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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