The two graphs below show the percentage of smokers and the consumption of alcohol in litres in selected countries for the period 1960-2000. Write a report for a lecturer describing the information in the graphs.

The two graphs below show the percentage of smokers and the consumption of alcohol in litres in selected countries for the period 1960-2000.

Write a report for a lecturer describing the information in the graphs.
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illustrate
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the
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information about the terms of proportion of smoking and
alcohol
in litres
which
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taken by people daily in four various regions
such
as
USA
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the USA
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, Japan,
Holland
and Turkey in four decades
during
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1960 and 2000.
In
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overall
,
Holland
constituted a major for smokers and
alcohol
drinkers whilst
least
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amount of both items were consumed by American and Turkish.
However
, there were lots of
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can
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be noticed in the
amount
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of people who smoke and drink regularly in all the nations over the periods. With regards to an initial chart, between 1960 and 1980, the
Holland
natives
was
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most popular for smoking every day which accounted
from
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nearly three-fifths to above
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two-fifths
two fifths
followed by Japan (approximately a half).
After
this
, in the upcoming 2 decades, the percentage of humans who smoke daily
was
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started
decreased
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dramatically
at
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over 30% in
the
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both countries.
Likewise
,
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America accounted for 40%
for
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regular smokers during 1960 and experienced a little less than
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declined
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to approximately a fifth
in
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the end of the period. The
second
graph proves that
an
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amount of
Holland
and
USA
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the USA
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for
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drinking
alcohol
in litres
were
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found 11%, 10%, 9%, 8% and 4% respectively between 1980, 1970 and 1960.
In contrast
, the two given regions were showing ups and downs
figure
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and following in zig zag trends in the remaining twenty years.
Lastly
,
alcohol
consumption in litres per person for Turkey remained relatively constant at 2% in all given years

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words alcohol, holland with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.

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