Nowadays people are spending more time away from their homes because they spend longer in their workplace. Discuss advantage and disadvantages

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These days people are spending more time away from their residents because they spend longer in their office. I will be elaborate both advantages and disadvantages of
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To begin
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with
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,
there are
plethora
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a plethora
of benefits if people
are do
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are doing
do
have done
work outside.
First
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and foremost, when individual are
do
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doing
work away from home and they
are get
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get
are getting
occasion for
enhance
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enhancing
enhanced
skill as well as
represent
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representatives
to the society. Another word
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,
when person are live without family and they are lean about how self represent to the society as well as
hegemony
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the hegemony
of the employees.
For instance
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,
report
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the report
a report
say
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says
that which people away from
home they
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home, they
become bolder because those are self tackle the barriers.
On the other hand
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,
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,
there are drawbacks if people
are leave
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are leaving
have left
leave
the home for working outside. They are gradually become far from their family because those are hardly come in the house,
such
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as lack in love
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.
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moreover
in addition
Moreover
, these days people are busy schedule and have not time for own make meal so they are more priorities
to
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in
the market food and it is harmful for the individual
this
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lead to medical
problems obesity,
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problems, obesity,
heart attack
,
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,
blood pressure.
To
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In
summary,
although
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outside
to
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of
the work is
also
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beneficial for the people and they can enhance the skill as well as they are
become
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becoming
bolder and independent in their
life but
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life, but
there are various drawbacks it cannot be denied
such
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as lack in love and impact on the intimate relationship.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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