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Some people believe that it is essential to include Physical Education in the curriculum of all school-age children. Others think that children’s time is better spent on more academic subjects.

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Fast developing world demands from people to access their prerogatives wisely,
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 aspect
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 includes children because prioritization of subjects in the early stage of life has a huge impact on their
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. It is a widely held notion that dedicated learning of academic subjects in
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future, whereas
 there is an opinion that opting for Physical Education is necessary in study programs. I personally belong to the
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 group and I am inclined to believe that academic education plays an essential role not only in a person's life but
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 in society.
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, to grow professionally and compete in the work environment an individual needs a strong command of different academic disciplines whether chosen profession has technical or humanitarian character.
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, valuable learning time in childhood must be distributed among different scientific subjects aiming to equip a person for the
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 challenges.
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, exposing a child to a variety of scientific topics allows the
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 one to make conscious choices in terms of profession which is
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, bringing Physical Education in
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 programs has a positive goal of keeping children healthy and promoting their
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exhibiting or calling for sportsmanship or fair play
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 sport lessons take precious time which must be spent on substantial topics.
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, children and their parents practicing an active lifestyle will always find ways to satisfy their needs by arranging
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exhibiting or calling for sportsmanship or fair play
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 events independently from
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the school
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 other types of
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children, which
 dislike active time pass and avoid participating in forced
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 physical lessons. To summarize, academic studies at
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 is an effective investment in the
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 and all subjects in
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 curriculum ought to target intellectual growth of a child leading to a professionally successful career which can potentially contribute to society.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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