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The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full-time or part-time.

The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full-time or part-time.
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The chart below shows the
number
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 of
men
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 and
women
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 in
further
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education
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 in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full-time or part-time. The chart illustrates data regarding the
number
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 of
male
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males
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 and
female
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females
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, attending full-time or part-time
education
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 in Britain grouped
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 statistical information in three time periods beginning in the 70s, 80s and 90s.
Overall
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, the
number
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 of
women
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 opting for part-time
education
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 grew over a given period,
whereas
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 the same figure for
men
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 experienced a slight decline. A stable growth
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was recorded
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 in terms of people electing a full-time method of
education
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 for both
men
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 and
women
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.
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, the quantity of individuals choosing a former
education
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 type is significantly greater than those of the latter.
Initially
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 in 1970/71 and 1980/81 more
men
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 than
women
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 were studying part-time
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 situation changed and in 1990 the
number
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 of females surpassed those of
men
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; reaching its maximum of around 1100
women
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. Regarding full-time
education
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, the figures for
women
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 were lowest at the beginning, namely less than
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100 were studying in
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 way after that full-time
education
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 attracted twice more
women
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 in 1990-1991. The same trend applies to
men
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, which
differ
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 at the beginning when twice more
men
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 than
women
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 attended full-time
education
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.
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