You work a part-time job in a company, and the company posted an advert seeking a person for a full-time position. Write a letter to your manager requesting to apply for the advertised position. In your letter say – Why do you want to apply? – What are your future goals? – Why would it be beneficial for the company?

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Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing

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letter regarding a full-time position available in your organization. Presently, I am employed as a part-time employee at Rabba Foods incorporation. I would like to please you in applying for the posted position of

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customer service representative.

From

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past

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few days, I was looking for a full-time opportunity because I have finished

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apply

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college and

available

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to work full-time.

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, your store location is near to my home so it will be feasible for me to reach home quickly. In future, I am intended to thrive my communication skills to focus on my personal development.

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, I will be focusing more on my job to achieve my professional and personal

goal

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Also

, I see myself as a manager of the organization in 5 years. As you know, the customer requires a well-behaved customer service representative who would provide outstanding service

with

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communicating with them. So, I believe my personal goal will be undoubtedly productive for the professional goal of the company. Thank you for your attention, and I look forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Sam,

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Grammar mistakes
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

184 words

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