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Today, some food travels travel thousands of miles from farms to consumers, Some people think it would be better to our environment and economy if people only eat local food. To what extent do the advantages outweigh the advantages?

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With the invention of
airplane
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the airplane
, international trade has become an important type of business. Foods, one of necessary supplies to keep people living, are
also
started
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starting
 to export or import between countries. Some merchants consider that imported
food
 is an area to earn huge profits.
However
, some local argue against
this
 international trade due to the destruction of
environment
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the environment
 and the damage of domestic
economy
.
This
 essay will focus on what disadvantages
do global
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does global food bring
do global food bring
food
 bring. Imported
food
 is detrimental to
domestic
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the domestic economy
economy
. Global
food
often attract
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often attracts
consumers’ eyes
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the consumers’ eyes
 owing to the better appearance or unique taste. The demand of imported
food
 increase lead to
the decrease need
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decrease the need
on
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for
 local
food
 production.
This
 results in threatening the local agriculture income and
therefore
 damages the domestic
economy
. Bananas,
for instance
, are a kind of fruits which can introduce from Philippines or produced by Taiwan ourselves. The sale of Philippines’ bananas is
popular
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more popular
 than ours due to the
beauty
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beautiful
 appearance and affordable price.
This
 had been brought local farmers into
serious situation
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a serious situation
 for a while.
As a result
, imported
food
 should be restricted. Global
food
also
 has negative effects to the
environment
. Through the trade of
food
 production, it generates a great deal of emission
such
 as carbon dioxide by the long distance of transportation.
Food mile
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Food miles
A food mile
, a measure for calculating pollution caused
in
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by
 the movement of
food
 production from a producer to a consumer, is used to present how harmful a global
food
 is.
In addition
, local
food
 is fresh and contains more nutritious than global
food
.
At
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As
 a consequence, local
food
 is
environment
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environmentally
 friendly and
also
 healthy to the diet. In conclusion, both for the
environment
 and domestic
economy
, the advantages of purchasing local
food
 has significantly outweigh the disadvantages of those.
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