As the world becomes technologically advanced, computers are replacing more and more jobs. Describe some job positions that may be lost because of computers, and discuss at least one problem that may result.

There is no shadow of doubt that today,
technology
has spread its arms everywhere in the world and it has changed the culture and social lifestyle of people. It is argued that many jobs are replaced
now a days
the period of time that is happening now; any continuous stretch of time including the moment of speech
nowadays
because of the advancement in the
technology
. In
this
essay I will discuss on
such
jobs which are likely to be
disappear
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disappearing
in the future because of the use of
computer
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computers
a computer
the computer
. To initiate, there are
manifold
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a manifold
of jobs which are
effected
acted upon; influenced
affected
by the use of computer in the field and getting demolished slowly and slowly.
Firstly
, teachers
are replaced
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is replaced
by the projector and the computers, as most of the institutes and universities prefer
technology
in
classroom
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the classroom
to make the students learn and adopt the things more easily and effetely. According to one
survey it
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survey, it
has been concluded that 75 percent of universities and schools are using
projector
Suggestion
a projector
the projector
projectors
and computers to teach students.
Thus
, a child became addicted to learning from
technology
with the increase of usage of computers.
Secondly
, a job of postmen is totally replaced by the email and the messages from which people can send via their own laptops and
phones but
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phones, but
in the ancient time the postmen used to do the same.
Furthermore
, jobs of sale service, accountant and the retailer are in danger because of the advancement in
technology everything is
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technology, everything is
possible through one click on the computer and phones. On the flip side of the coin, with the increment in the usage of computers has led to the increment in the rate of unemployment.
For instance
,
technology
has increased the rate of unemployment as it has taken the position of many people in the
market which
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market, which
lead them to involve in the crimes like robbery and other bad activities.
Thus
, crime is on the peak due to unemployment. Hammering
on
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in
the
last
nail, as
computers has
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computers, has
eliminated many jobs
,
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,
new positions
has
Suggestion
have
to be invented so that people will get
job
Suggestion
the job
jobs
and they can start their own business and earn their livelihood respectfully.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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