As the world becomes technologically advanced, computers are replacing more and more jobs. Describe some job positions that may be lost because of computers, and discuss at least one problem that may result.

There is no shadow of doubt that today,

technology

has spread its arms everywhere in the world and it has changed the culture and social lifestyle of people. It is argued that many jobs are replaced

now a days

the period of time that is happening now; any continuous stretch of time including the moment of speech

nowadays

because of the advancement in the

technology

. In

this

essay I will discuss on

such

jobs which are likely to be

disappear

Suggestion

disappearing

in the future because of the use of

computer

Suggestion

computers

a computer

the computer

. To initiate, there are

manifold

Suggestion

a manifold

of jobs which are

effected

acted upon; influenced

affected

by the use of computer in the field and getting demolished slowly and slowly.

Firstly

, teachers

are replaced

Suggestion

is replaced

by the projector and the computers, as most of the institutes and universities prefer

technology

classroom

Suggestion

the classroom

to make the students learn and adopt the things more easily and effetely. According to one

survey it

Accept comma addition

survey, it

has been concluded that 75 percent of universities and schools are using

projector

Suggestion

a projector

the projector

projectors

and computers to teach students.

Thus

, a child became addicted to learning from

technology

with the increase of usage of computers.

Secondly

, a job of postmen is totally replaced by the email and the messages from which people can send via their own laptops and

phones but

Accept comma addition

phones, but

in the ancient time the postmen used to do the same.

Furthermore

, jobs of sale service, accountant and the retailer are in danger because of the advancement in

technology everything is

Suggestion

technology, everything is

possible through one click on the computer and phones. On the flip side of the coin, with the increment in the usage of computers has led to the increment in the rate of unemployment.

For instance

technology

has increased the rate of unemployment as it has taken the position of many people in the

market which

Accept comma addition

market, which

lead them to involve in the crimes like robbery and other bad activities.

Thus

, crime is on the peak due to unemployment. Hammering

Suggestion

the

last

nail, as

computers has

Accept comma addition

computers, has

eliminated many jobs

Accept space

new positions

has

Suggestion

have

to be invented so that people will get

job

Suggestion

the job

jobs

and they can start their own business and earn their livelihood respectfully.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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8Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
17Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

338 words

4.00

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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As the world becomes technologically advanced, computers are replacing more and more jobs. Describe some job positions that may be lost because of computers, and discuss at least one problem that may result.

Include an introduction and conclusion

ome children spend hours every day on their smartphones. Why is this case? Do you think is a positive or negative develompent?

Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

How much time do you spend on watching news on Facebook? Do you think it is beneficial to do that?

Schools should focus on academic success and passing examinations. Skills such as cookery, dressmaking and woodworking should not be taught at school as it is better to learn these from family. To that extent do you agree or disagree?

Task 2 : Some people believe that if a police force carries guns, this encourages a higher level of violence in that society. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?