The chart below shows the percentage of people who ate five portions of fruits and vegetables per day in the UK from 2001 to 2008

The chart below shows the percentage of people who ate five portions of fruits and vegetables per day in the UK from 2001 to 2008
The diagram below illustrates the percentage of citizens
which
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who
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consumed five portions of fruits and vegetables a day around the UK during the period between 2001 and 2008.
Overall
, the
citizen's
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citizen
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ratio, which consumed five portions of food increased each year, leading to a significant rise in the UK and
decline
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a decline
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gradually since 2006. Meanwhile,
women
's consumption was hitting a peak than any other gender every year. In 2001, the ratio of
children
consumed per day located at over 10%,
whereas
men
earned more than 15% and
women
's proportion was highest at
approximate
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20%. In the 3 subsequent years,
children
and
men
were stabilized
while
the
women
grew sharply and earned over 25% in 2003.
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2006, the rate of
children
,
women
,
men
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and men
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reached peaks of over 20%, 25%,
30
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and 30
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% respectively. Contrarily, in the following 2 years, all the categories declined gradually except
men
, which maintained at 25% in 2007.
To2008
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In 2008
, the percentage of citizens
consumed
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who consumed
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fruits and vegetables decreased
down
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apply
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to
approximate
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approximately
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20% for
children
,
while
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apply
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25% for
men
and 30% for
women
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words women, children, men with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.

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