The chart below shows the percentage of people who ate five portions of fruits and vegetables per day in the UK from 2001 to 2008

The chart below shows the percentage of people who ate five portions of fruits and vegetables per day in the UK from 2001 to 2008
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The diagram below illustrates the percentage of citizens
which
Correct pronoun usage
who

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consumed five portions of fruits and vegetables a day around the UK during the period between 2001 and 2008.
Overall
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, the
citizen's
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citizen

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ratio, which consumed five portions of food increased each year, leading to a significant rise in the UK and
decline
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a decline

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gradually since 2006. Meanwhile,
women
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's consumption was hitting a peak than any other gender every year. In 2001, the ratio of
children
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consumed per day located at over 10%,
whereas
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men
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earned more than 15% and
women
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's proportion was highest at
approximate
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approximately

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20%. In the 3 subsequent years,
children
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and
men
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were stabilized
while
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the
women
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grew sharply and earned over 25% in 2003.
At
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In

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2006, the rate of
children
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,
women
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,
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men
Correct word choice
and men

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reached peaks of over 20%, 25%,
30
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and 30

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% respectively. Contrarily, in the following 2 years, all the categories declined gradually except
men
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, which maintained at 25% in 2007.
To2008
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In 2008

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, the percentage of citizens
consumed
Correct pronoun usage
who consumed

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fruits and vegetables decreased
down
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apply

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to
approximate
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approximately

Approximate seems to be the wrong part of speech for this context.

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20% for
children
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It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

,
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

while
Correct word choice
apply

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25% for
men
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It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

and 30% for
women
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It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words women, children, men with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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