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the chart below gives information on the percentage of british people giving money to charity for the years 1990 and 2010.

the chart below gives information on the percentage of british people giving money to charity for the years 1990 and 2010.
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The bar chart illustrates the proportion of British people raising money for charity by 5 different
age
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 groups in 2 years 1990 and 2010. In general, it can be seen that the
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 the percentage of British people donating money to charity decreased for all
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 groups, the opposite was true
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for
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age
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group
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 51-61 and over 65.
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, the proportion of contributors in the
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group
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 18-25 was the smallest
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 2 years.
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 with, the period between 1990 and 2010 witnessed a sharp decline in 18-25 donors of 10% from 17% in 1990.
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group
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 26-35 and over 65 had
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similar figures for British people donating money to charity, approximately 32% each in 1990. Over the
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 10 years saw a gradual decrease in donors of
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group
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 26-35
of
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 7% to 24%.
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, the figure for
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the group
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group
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 over 65 slightly grew by 3% to 35% in 2010.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, group with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • charitable giving
  • demographic analysis
  • economic factors
  • social awareness
  • technological advancements
  • societal values
  • donation patterns
  • functioning and effectiveness
  • speculate
  • future trends
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