the chart below gives information on the percentage of british people giving money to charity for the years 1990 and 2010.

the chart below gives information on the percentage of british people giving money to charity for the years 1990 and 2010.
The bar chart illustrates the proportion of British people raising money for charity by 5 different
age
groups in 2 years 1990 and 2010. In general, it can be seen that the
while
the percentage of British people donating money to charity decreased for all
age
groups, the opposite was true
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group
51-61 and over 65.
Besides
, the proportion of contributors in the
age
group
18-25 was the smallest
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2 years.
To begin
with, the period between 1990 and 2010 witnessed a sharp decline in 18-25 donors of 10% from 17% in 1990.
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group
26-35 and over 65 had
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similar figures for British people donating money to charity, approximately 32% each in 1990. Over the
next
10 years saw a gradual decrease in donors of
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26-35
of
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7% to 24%.
In contrast
, the figure for
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group
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over 65 slightly grew by 3% to 35% in 2010.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.

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  • charitable giving
  • demographic analysis
  • economic factors
  • social awareness
  • technological advancements
  • societal values
  • donation patterns
  • functioning and effectiveness
  • speculate
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