A persons worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values, such as honor, kindness and trust, no longer seem important.

In
this
day and a
ge social
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age, social
judgement is
way
different than it used to be in the past. During the medieval times, people were judged based on their values,
such
as trust, loyalty and h
onor.
bestow honor or rewards upon
honour
It was important to
such
an extent that warriors used to kill themselves in order to escape immoral actions, in a process called H
onor
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Honour
Suicide.
This
judgement h
ave changed
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has changed
d
rastically mainly
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drastically, mainly
due to the dawn of the Industrial Revolution and the development of social media. Despite
this
shift, these "old-fashioned values" are still considered in some parts of our society. Concomitant with the creation of social networks and the growth of capitalism, personal possessions started to take a big part o
n
Suggestion
in
the
way
people judge each other. In the social media world, usually the person that posts photos with luxury cars and expensive possessions, are viewed as happier and more successful in life.
Besides
that, in modern times, capitalism and acquisitive power, which were ramped up by the Industrial Revolution, have started to play a major role in social status and in the
way
people see each other. The richer someone is and the higher its social status is, the better
this
person's life is.
However
,
this
shallow
way
of judging others is not true in every part of our society. Some values considered old-fashioned are still taken into account when making someone's judgement.
For instance
, in job interviews, the social status and the material possessions a person h
ave has
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had
an insignificant importance on making a hire or no-hire decision. Values
such
as honesty, loyalty and kindness play a bigger role.
In addition
, in order to make long lasting relationships, either romantic or friendship, these values are
also
way
more important than personal possessions and acquisitive power. In conclusion, shallow judgements are really common nowadays, mainly because of the superficial characters social networks show in their feeds.
Nonetheless
, people still take into consideration moral "old-fashioned" values in order to build healthy relationships and make big decisions.
Therefore
, the importance of values
such
as h
onor
bestow honor or rewards upon
honour
and kindness should be passed on from generation to generation so as to achieve a more successful future for other generations.
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