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Many employers are now offering their employees the option to work from home. As a results, employees will have much more flexible hours in the future. Is this a positive or negative development?

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Recently, many companies offer workers that they could
work
 from
home
 leading to several issues both advantages and disadvantages. While some people think that only workers can benefit from
this
, I believe it has positive effects on both employees and employers. It is clear that working online could bring about several advantages.
Firstly
, people can control their life. In the other words, they have an amount of
work
 they have to do and a deadline, and they could decide when and how they complete it. For those who are parents, they can have more time for their children which helps tightening their family.
Moreover
,
home
 workers are not under pressure and seem to be
work
Suggestion
working
efficient
Suggestion
efficiently
. Simply because of a large amount of time each day going to
work
Accept comma addition
work, then
then
 come back
home
 could be replaced for doing exercise or doing housework. Turning to another perspective, there are
also
 many issues that both employers and employees must deal with. The
first
 thing is the fact that those who
work
 at
home
 will lack interaction,
thus
 feeling of loneliness and isolation. Another drawback is the managers and co-workers only communicate via email or social network.
For instance
, if there have any problem it will cause some misunderstanding.
Therefore
, it is often better to solve problems face-to-face, while working in an office can create a team atmosphere
that is
 better for productivity. Overall, it seems that working from
home
 can make life’s worker easier and MORE comfortable.
Although
, employees should consider carefully whether working from
home
 or at the office is the appropriate choice.
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