Each year the crime rate increases. What are the causes of crime and what could be done to prevent the rise in criminal activity?

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the recent years,
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has become an important issue for many countries as it is becoming more cruel and violent. There are many reasons of
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the high crime rate
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rate
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and one of them is lack of education and
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. There are various solutions to
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of
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and violence.
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the main reason
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is unemployment. People choose
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the wrong path
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when they do not have
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jobs
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in a short period of time
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they rob
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reason of rising criminal activity, in my opinion, is lack of knowledge and proper skills of making right decisions in arduous situations.
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, sometimes incidents happen by mistake or if people do not find another solution to the situation. To my mind, there are two main strategies which government can utilize to control and decrease the
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rate
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. One of the solutions of
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problem is increasing the level of education and providing various courses so people can develop required skills for applying the job. Another solution is creating more job opportunities,
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example manufacturing
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example, manufacturing
industries or new factories, thereby opening new work places.
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is quite a good motivation for earning
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legally without any
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and legal liability. To conclude, I deeply believe that it is necessary to take immediate actions by providing
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facilities which I mentioned before which can really help to curb the rising
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of
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