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The graph below shows the amount of money spent on books in four various counties of Europe- Germany, Italy, France and Austria from the year 1995 up to 2005.

The graph below shows the amount of money spent on books in four various counties of Europe- Germany, Italy, France and Austria from the year 1995 up to 2005.
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The provided graph illustrates the amount of
money
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 spent on
books
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 in four various counties of Europe-
Germany
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, Italy, France and Austria from the year 1995 up to 2005.
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 it is evident that people in
Germany
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 more
money
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 on
books
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 in comparison with
other
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the other
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 three countries.
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, during the
10year
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10-year
 period, spending on
books
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 had an upward trend in all given four countries. In detail, between 1995 and 1999 we see that
money
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 spent on
books
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 in
Germany
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 and Austria significantly increased
from80
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from 80
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 90
million
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 and from 30 to 40
million
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, respectively. The situation in France and Italy is a bit different, an indicator of
money
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 spent on
books
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 fluctuates from 50 to 60
million
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 and over the
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 six years it reached the
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peak
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 of 75
million
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 in France and 62
million
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 in Italy. Despite the
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, spending on
books
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 in
Germany
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 had gone up
over
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to over
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 90
million
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. The figure for Austria
ose
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rose
 gradually to 60
million
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 in 2003 and reached
the
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a
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 peak
for
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of
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 about 72
million
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 by the year 2005.
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, an increase
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 expenditure on
books
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 in
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this
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these
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 particular four countries means that the educated population and qualified personnel
rised
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rose
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 during
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 period.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 88%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words money, books, germany, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "amount" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuates" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend
  • expenditure
  • fluctuations
  • economic factors
  • population changes
  • cultural shifts
  • spending patterns
  • steady growth
  • decline
  • projection
  • implications
  • data reliability
  • comparative analysis
  • highest/lowest expenditure
  • investments in literature
  • consumer behavior
  • market trends
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