Some people believe that teenagers should concentrate on all school subjects. But others believe that teenagers should focus on the subject that they are good at or that they find the most interest. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Have you ever heard of Malcolm X? He was an African American Islamic spiritual leader, who articulated concepts of race pride and black nationalism. He once said: “Education is the passport to the future, for tomorrow belongs to those who prepare for it today.” I absolutely agree with him. Education plays a vital role in the modern world. It is one of the most important factors in the development of

sociaty

an extended social group having a distinctive cultural and economic organization

society

societies

. Children, teenagers go to school to acquire knowledge. Some people think that students should study all school subjects, while others think that teenagers should focus on the subjects that they are good at or that they find the most interest. In my opinion, young people should focus on specific subjects.

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of all, all subjects are equally significant in our life. They are important for our common development. Each person should have any idea of each subject, because it’s always more interesting to talk to an

enlighted

having knowledge and spiritual insight

enlightened

person, rather than to a non-educated one.

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, we need specialists in different realms, and

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what is going to be my

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point about. Nowadays

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high school curriculum is demanding and difficult. No matter how

intellegent

having the capacity for thought and reason especially to a high degree

intelligent

a teenager is, it’s unlikely that all of them master their skills in all subjects. As children

grow they

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grow, they

have to choose not only the subjects they are interested in

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but

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the ones that will be connected

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their carrier

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so they could learn them deeper. I personally think that students need to focus on subjects that are connected with their profession, so they could easily study for the final examination and

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become a specialist. To sum up I would like to say that all subjects deserve attention,

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students should select some subjects they are interested in, so they could learn them deeper in order to be more qualified in

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the future

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

7.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

307 words

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Some people believe that teenagers should concentrate on all school subjects. But others believe that teenagers should focus on the subject that they are good at or that they find the most interest. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

Include an introduction and conclusion

You live in a house opposite a park. Every day a man brings large dogs to the park and lets them run free. Write a letter to your local council complaining about the danger. In your letter -say where the park is, -say how often this happens -give a description of the man and the dogs.

Despite a large number of gyms , salandry lifestyle is still gaining popularity, What problem cause by this,

Image that if a professor wants students to learn as much as possible about a project in a short period of time, it is better to work in a group or it is better to let students study alone? Which one is better?

Some people think government should ban dangerous sports; others, however, believe that people should be free to do whatever they choose. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Some say that it would be better if the majority of employees worked from home instead of traveling to a workplace every day. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of working from home. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.