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Some organisations believe that their employees should dress smartly. Others value quality of work above appearance. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Workers should elegant about their attire up in the opinion of some institutions, but others only focus on employment quality whether it is a highly debatable one. There are different companies on both sides of the debate who have their opinion based on their surroundings. There are some reasons that can lead one to go in favour of the worker's smart arrival.
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, several organizations that job with government projects concentrate on staff member presence because they have to join different meetings, presentations, etc. Most of the government organizations, strict to formal uniform up. So, they
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 try to maintain that for their purposes.
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, some companies think that the people who have nicely dressed, help to grow their confidence and they can perform better. So, they dressed up nicely.
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, there are some companies who are trusted that not presentation, the production quality is more important.
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, most of the private institutions that production based on technology, highly pay attention to their worker performances. They rely on that the hard effort and good achievement help to
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, some organization employees are not so rich. They can’t afford the fashionable or a costly formal gown. They wear anything and go to industry and the company trusts heir progress. Like garment factories, etc. In conclusion, I would like to state my opinion that I totally rely on performance neither than what they wear. I engaged in a software company, they
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 focus on the quality of performance. If they focus on the su
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 it would difficult for the member.

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