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With an increasing number of people eating fast food, which if eating too regularly can cause health issues, some people think that the only solution is to ban it completely. To what extent do you agree?

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Nowadays, a rising number of people continue to eat fast
food
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, which may cause serious health problems.
Same people
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The same people
 are convinced that the only key to solving
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 issue is to forbid permanently them. In my opinion, I think that renewing their menu with a healthier one could be a right solution.
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, I
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 believe that individuals should be more responsible for their diet.
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, the large turnout in fast
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 is mainly due to the wide range and advertisements. Many people suggest eliminating fatter dishes in the menu by replacing them with healthier ones,
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 would be a great help in reducing population health problems.
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, in
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 way bigger companies like McDonalds, KFC and Burger King would not lose part of their profits. Now, the average person in the whole world goes to fast
food
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 restaurants twice a week, which is too much to counteract health issues. Another point to consider is that many people do not follow a proper diet that provides a right portion of each
macronutrients
a substance needed only in small amounts for normal body function (e.g., vitamins or minerals)
micronutrient
.
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, the individual will alone is not enough to achieve that goal,
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 in order to reduce these kind of issues, governments should be able to help
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the population
 by introducing commercials and awareness campaigns.
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, citizens will be more likely to be involved in following a balanced diet. In conclusion, to deal with
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the increasing number
 of fast
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 eaters, companies
should be encourage
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should encourage
 the quality of
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food whereas
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food, whereas
 individuals should be urged to replace their
food
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 habits with healthier ones.

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