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The diagram shows a method of shaping glass containers.

The diagram shows a method of shaping glass containers.
#method #glass #containers
This
 image demonstrates how glass bottles are formed.
Overall
,
it is clear that
 there are nine stages in the process, beginning with
heated
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 the glass and the process ends with the disposal of the damaged containers
while
 the intact bottles go to packaging.
According to
 the
diagram
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 the first stage of the process is melting, where the glass
placed
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is placed
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 in a furnace at 105 cellulose
then
, He put
it
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in the mould and
press
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presses
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 it to form. After that, The container gets to the thick wall and
following
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follows
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 that air inter to
making
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make
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 a final shape. Again the bottle is heated at 482
Kiln
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Kilns
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. It needs to cool
at
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to
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 25 for sixty mins before
to get
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getting
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 ready. In the final step, The man-made check on the condition of
flasks
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the flasks
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. If the damage
of
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to
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 the containers he will disposal,
it
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apply
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in the waste and the intact it goes to packaging.
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