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Nowadays, many people have to work longer times, and they feel more stressful than before. What are the reasons ? What can employers do to make their life easier ?

#people #work #times #employers #life
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Nowadays
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 many people have to work longer times, and they feel more stressful than before. What is the reason? What can employers do to make their life easier? In
this
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 modern epic, the
time
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 has changed significantly, people working
hard
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harder
 than before which cause stress. The main
problem
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 to
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 cause is increasing competition in the market among the businesses. The employers should look into the matter and take the most viable solutions to cope with the workplace stress. Primarily
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,
 the main
problem
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 associated with hectic is the vast competition in the market due to globalisation. The reason behind
this
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 is that
living standard
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the living standard
 of people is accelerated because of which the demand of
product
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the product
 is attaining its peak. For fulfilment the demands every big, small, and medium, businesses
comes
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come
 in the rat
race so
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race, so
ever
(used of count nouns) each and all of the members of a group considered singly and without exception
every
 employee of the organisation has to sit long hours to meet the demand of the market
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,
as a result
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 the workers do not have enough
time
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 for their family and for their
health
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 which leads to frustration and
health
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 issues. To tackle
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problem
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, companies should ensure a
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health
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healthy
healthier
 workplace environment. They should support their employees financially,
in addition
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 to that every company should a proper check working hours of their workers and give over work to every
worker according to a
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worker, according to a
 mandatory level. By
this
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 every employee
have
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has
a
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an
 ample
time
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 to spend with their family and for their
health
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 too.
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Moreover a
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Moreover, a
 recent serve by a business magazine state all organizations make it necessary to off at least 48 hours in a
week which
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week, which
 result in 83 %
more productivity
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more productive
 and satisfaction among workers. in a nutshell , i would like to say that , it cannot be denied that working hard is the demand of
time
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, and meeting deadlines and competition are the cause of stress in the workplaces for that management should take some initiatives to reduce the
problem
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