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Traffic problems are increasing in most cities. What can be done about this?

#traffic #cities
The
traffic
 disasters are growing in most towns. So the majority people's
life
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lives
is endangering
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are endangered
are endangering
. There are some solutions to
this
 problem, and I will explain them with relevant examples in
this
 essay.
Initially
, the vehicle system is improving at the present.
Therefore
, the
traffic
 problems are happening more quickly than past. So, the most accidents are occurring by
countless quantity
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the countless quantity
 of the transports. The
first
 key of the problem is reducing the number of cars unable drivers.
For example
, the person who cannot correctly lead the car should be prohibited by police to drive it. The
another
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
 solution is that, an incapable
drivers
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driver
 should be instructed.
For instance
, their insurance or ID need be bereaved until they will learn to manage an automobile again.
Secondly
, the passengers
also
 guilty on the
traffic
 incidents. Some of them don't know about own obligation. Meanwhile, others do errors deliberately, and they invert all faults
to
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of
 the people who direct the cars. The
first
 type of the people should be taught to their liability.
For example
, someone should tell the principles which are used on a road. From my perspective, the
second
 type of pedestrians must be punished for their
disobey
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disobedience
. There are many ways to penalize them,
such
 as, penalty bills or sometimes jails. To sum up, the
traffic
 catastrophes
are makes
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are made
are making
 by both of
species
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the species
 of the humans which include drivers and walkers. The main key to solve
this
 problem educating folk to the rule of the motion on the road.
Otherwise
, they should be castigated by government.
Consequently
,
this
 complex status will be solved.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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