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Big salaru is much more important than job satisfaction. Do you agree or disagree?

#salaru #job #satisfaction
Some people believe that high wage the most important in choosing
job
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a job
jobs
. While others think that enjoying by workload is more essential. I agree with the
second
 group of people and reasons I am going to explain in the following paragraphs.
First
 of all, desirable job will keep people motivated and enthusiastic. That will help not afraid to take on and confront given heavy tasks by
boss
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the boss
.
For example
,
person
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a person
the person
 who
do not have
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does not have
incentive
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an incentive
 to work is unlikely that he or she can achieve something more.
Furthermore
, any amount of money cannot give you happiness. If people worked in unsatisfactory work, it might be cause for being out of steam.
For instance
, everyone can find
power
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the power
 to do favourite
works and
Accept comma addition
works, and
 wake up in the morning without complications.
Nevertheless
, high salary may provide you
good
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better
 living conditions in accommodations as well
as in nutrition
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as nutrition
. In additional to
this
 you can allow yourself to buy expensive clothings and technologies. But It will not give you
sense
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a sense
 of
fulfillment
a feeling of satisfaction at having achieved your desires
fulfilment
.
Additionally
 good wage give you more opportunities.
Such
 as going abroad for recharging your energy.
However
, you cannot be engrossed at your workplace. To sum up, I believe that being engaged with your work much better than everyday complain about your insufficient job.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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