Some people think secondary school students should study international news as one of their subjects. Other people say this is a waste of valuable school time. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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People have different views on the

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are being taught as part of academic studies. Some people believe that global events should be added as a subject in secondary school, I am of the opinion that

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would be an additional burden. There are some benefits of studying international news in school.

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, many countries are deeply integrated with each other because of globalisation.

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means that a major change in

economy

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the economy

of a country may impact the economy of other countries. Discussing global events, in a classroom,

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the pupil

a pupil

pupils

may understand

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changes in the economy by comparing it with the current scenario.

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discussion can

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enhance their analytical skills.

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, it may be a stepping stone for some children who would

choose international

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choose an international

journalism as their

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the particular occupation for which you are trained

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, as they would be familiar with most of the basic knowledge discussed in the classroom.

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, students are introduced with complex concepts in some subjects like Algebra and Geometry as they enter in

secondary class

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a secondary class

. Adding additional subject may be an extra burden on them, physically and mentally, as they have to carry more books and memorize more concepts. As a consequence, it may have a detrimental effect on their health.

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, as per research conducted by the Cambridge University in the year 2018, children committing suicide due to academic pressure was increased by 18% as compared to the

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year.

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of adding more topics,

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teachers

the teacher

can motivate pupils to study or practice art which they are interested

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. If they will invest more time on doing things they like, they may become a professional. In conclusion,

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having more knowledge as a

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is beneficial, I believe that with additional studies would only have negative consequence

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them.

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Topic Vocabulary:

Global awareness
Critical thinking
Global citizenship
Cultural diversity
Communication skills
Historical context
World affairs
Academic subjects
Bias
Misinformation
Age-appropriate
Media literacy
Educational enrichment

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Some people think secondary school students should study international news as one of their subjects. Other people say this is a waste of valuable school time. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

You were recently impressed by a staff member at a supermarket. Write a letter to the manager of the supermarket. In your letter. • describe the situation • explain how you were helped • state what you are going to do as a result of this good experience

In many countries, people are now living longer than even before. some people say an ageing population creates problems for governments. Other people think there are benefits if society has more elderly people. To what extent do the advantages of having ageing population outweigh the disadvantages.

Education and health care should be funded by the government and free for everyone. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Question, without capital punishment our lives less secure crimes and violence increase , capital punishments is essential to control violence to what extent do you agree or disagree ?

In some countries, owning a home rather than renting ones is very important for people? Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a postivie or negative situation?