The charts below show the main reasons for the study among students of different age groups and the amount of support they received from employers. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the main reasons for the study among students of different age groups and the amount of support they received from employers.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The first bar chart illustrates the proper reasons for the
class
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,
suchsuch
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such such
as the career and the
interest
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where
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whereas
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the
second
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bar chart illustrates the support from employers
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as time off and help with fees
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different ages respectively. When the age is below 26, the most cause of the
class
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of
people
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is a
race
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about four-fifths where only one in ten do
class
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for the sake of
interest
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. In
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youth group, the support from employers
about
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two-thirds. From the youth of 26 to 29, the significant cause of study is
the
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apply
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race
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which is two-thirds, but only less than one-fifth perform their
class
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for their
interest
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only. At
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youth, the help from the employer
about
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a half
percent
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per cent
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. In the meantime, the maturity from 30 to 39, the most cause of the
class
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is the
race
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about more than half where one-fourth of
people
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take to
class
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only about the enthusiasm. In
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maturity
class
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, only one-
third
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proportion get help from employers.
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, the old of 40 to 49, the reason for the
class
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has an equal proportion of
race
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and
interest
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and
this
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club of
people
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get
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gets
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more than
one
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one-third
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third
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proportion help from the boss. In the
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old age group
people
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whose ages are over 49, most of them have studied for their
interest
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at about two-
third
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ration where they get help from an employer than 40
percentage
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per cent
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such
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as time off and payment. I recapitulate
overall
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from
this
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trend, the
race
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reason for studying is decreasing in terms of high age.
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from
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an employer has been sinking at middle maturity.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "such, third".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words class, interest, people, race with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "illustrates" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 6 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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