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Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, however, think that difference is always a good thing. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

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With the increase of global economic and technological development,
people
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's opinion of the best way to spend their
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spending on
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 has changed,
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 making us try different
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 to gain new
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. Some
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 would love to spend
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 on the same
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while
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 others prefer to
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 the activities they do in life over
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 or not as both ways have advantages and disadvantages.
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 I believe that
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better for life. Let me explore both sides of
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 issue. There are some benefits and drawbacks
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 doing the same
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 for a long
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. In a job or career, employees who remain consistent in their work would develop proficient
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.
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, if
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 keep working as tour guides in the tourist industry, they
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 develop more professional managing administrative and communication
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, these tour guides might not be happy doing the same thing year in
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 out. If
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 work on the same thing,
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they will would get bored with the routine.
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,
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 would practice well their
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 by repeating the same words even though they would be experienced and expert professional guides but they would lose interest in it one day and feel a need to try different/new
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. Meanwhile, There are
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 pros and cons to changing the daily routine. One typical advantage is that
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 can try different
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 to gain new experience.
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, if
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change
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 jobs, they might make new friends and develop new
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 in different positions.
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, the con disadvantage is that
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 would not make progress in their
career
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 because they would not stay long enough to gain important
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 and be promoted. certain circumstances.
People
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 would not be able to receive opportunities to get promoted in their job
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 in companies because they do not spend
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enough
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practicing
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skills
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 in the position they work in on.
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,
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we can see that changing the daily routine creates benefits for
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, but at the same
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, they have to
lose
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sacrifice something certain opportunities for
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 in other areas. In conclusion, even though
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 in life/making changes changing the daily routine has advantages and disadvantages, I believe that changing what we do
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is rewarding because, as long as
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 do not
change
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 too fast in the method, they can learn proficient
skills
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 in the previous routine, and apply and adapt those
skills
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 to different situations later.

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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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