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The diagram shows how the rainwater is collected for the use of drinking water in Australia.

The diagram shows how the rainwater is collected for the use of drinking water in Australia.
#rainwater #water #australia
The given diagram gives data about
different
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 steps of rain filtration to produce drinking water in one of the Australian towns.
At
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 the first stage, rainwater drops out from the roof of the house to the tube. Afterwards, it goes through the water filter and turns to
the
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storage. From the storage, it goes through the tube to another box with chemicals.
At
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 that box, water is treated
by
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with
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 chemical elements to be filtered. After proper filtration, it rises through the tube to the
peoples’
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people’s
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house
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houses
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Vocabulary: The word "goes" was used 2 times.
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