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Many university students live with their families, while others live away from home because their universities are in different places. What are the advantages and disadvantages of both situations?

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Most students live along with their family for pursuing higher education while
other
plural of other; the people or things not already mentioned
others
 have to stay away from their families as their universities are in
different vicinity
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a different vicinity
.There are both advantages and disadvantages of both the scenarios discussed below Those students who live with their family get
lot
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lots
 of
support
 from their elders and simultaneously they imbibe family values which is utmost necessary for the youngsters.
For example
,
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pupils along with their studies might enjoy family functions like marriages
,
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birthday celebrations
,
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social gatherings of the family
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,
etc
continuing in the same way
etc.
.
In addition
,
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,
 they
also
 cherish living with their
sibblings
a person's brother or sister
siblings
sibling
 and
also
 share
special bond
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a special bond
 with them.
This
 helps pupils to stay mentally strong
,
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,
happy and grow
efficiently leading
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efficiently, leading
 to better focus on academics.
However
, all these can sometimes be
disadvantegeous
constituting a disadvantage
disadvantageous
disadvantages
 as the children might become dependent on their parents for their
day
 to
day
 activities like cleaning their rooms
,
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,
cooking food etc.
Also
,
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sharing room with
sibblings
a person's brother or sister
siblings
 can sometimes lead to
lot
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a lot
 of disturbance while studying during exams ultimately leading to lack of concentration.
On the other hand
,
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,
 students staying away from their family can save
lot
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a lot
lots
 of
time
 in travelling as they might stay near to the university as a paying guest or in the university
hostals
a hotel providing overnight lodging for travelers
hostels
 itself because of
this
 they will get more
time
 to focus on studies and extracurricular activities.When it comes to staying in the
hostal
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Hostal
hotel
hospital
 pupils will be sharing rooms with either their classmates or someone who has enrolled in professional course
,
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,
this
 will help them to focus more on studies with full concentration without causing any disturbance.
This
 has its own disadvantages as the student will have to
do
engage in
make
 their entire
day
 to
day
 activities by
themself
reflexive form of "them"
themselves
 along with their studies as
their
in or at that place
there
 will be no family
support
.Pupils can sometimes feel homesick. In conclusion, for both the scenarios university students staying with their families and staying away from family have pros and cons.Pupils who stay with their families will have their elders
besides
 them for moral
support
 and
on
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for
 the same
time
 family can be the reason for
distraction
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the distraction
 whereas students staying away will be saving
time
 in travelling and being with mature roommates but can be disturbed due to lack of family
support
.

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