Some people prefer hobbies that require technology while some people prefer hobbies that do not require technology .Discussthe both views and give your opinon.

Technology
has
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changed
the way of people's leisure activity
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Some masses like to
use
new
technology
to
fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
their pastime while other individuals
donot
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do not
use
these kind of technological hobbies in their life.Both views will be
discuss
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discussed
in the upcoming paragraphs. To commence with
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users of
technology opine
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the technology opine
that
use
of automation is more
benefical
promoting or enhancing well-being
beneficial
for them due to
this
reason they prefer obsession which are recommended by applied science
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Many people deem that they have
easy approach
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an easy approach
to make appropriate.
For example
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people can play games
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on
their mobile phones
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they have no need of other players because
mobile game
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the mobile game
offer
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offers
them automatic players
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Moreover
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individuals can
learn about their interest by searching on
internet
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the internet
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There are many more videos on different
topies
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Furthermore
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,
humanbeings
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human beings
do many things in four
wall
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walls
of their room without moving anywhere. As if anyone has a big fond of music he can easily listen by electronic gadgets without go to attend any live singing event.
On the other hand
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other people
aviod
stay clear from; keep away from; keep out of the way of someone or something
avoid
these kind of hobbies because they want to enjoy nature and experience out from their home. Like
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health issues are
introducing
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introduced
by using these type of telecommunications
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In addition
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people cannot interact with other people who live around them
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Individuals
likes
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like
to spend their most of time in which they
donot
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do not
loss anything and gain more things
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In sum up
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I believe that there is no doubt
technology
plays vital role in
everperson
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every person
ever person
's life. People give more importance to
use
robotics but
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robotics, but
they have to need
more aware
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more awareness
about the advantage and disadvantage of
technology
and
then
persue
carry out or participate in an activity; be involved in
pursue
their hobbies
.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

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Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

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