The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts give information about how people consume three types of unhealthy nutrients (
sodium
, saturated fats and added sugars) in typical meals(breakfast
, dinner
, lunch
and snacks
) in the USA.
Overall
, breakfast
is healthier than other
three meals, with the lowest figures for all the types of unhealthy nutrients. Correct article usage
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On the other hand
, dinner
and lunch
are the most unhealthy meals, which have the highest and second
highest figures for both sodium
and saturated fat. Although
snacks
contain the most added sugar, dinner
still has second
highest number of that.
In the morning, American people absorb 14% of Add an article
the second
sodium
of
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snacks
. After breakfast
, the amount of sodium
increase to 29%, which means that they consume more sodium
in lunch
, and the figure for dinner
increase even more to 43%.
In terms of Saturated fat, people also
absorb the least of it from breakfast
(16%). The pattern is similar to sodium
that
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in that
lunch
has more saturated fat (26%), and dinner
has even more of it (37%).
As for added sugar, the proportions for breakfast
, lunch
and dinner
are 16%, 19% and 23% respectively. It is also
an increasing pattern, but the difference is that the figure for snacks
is the highest(42%) instead
of dinner
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