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Write about the following topic. When talking about success, we often think of people who are rich or famous. In your opinion, what are the qualities that characterise a successful person? Why do you think these should be the criteria? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.

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In the modern word everyone want to become a successful person and try best to do so. Some people think those who have
money
 those are
successful
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successful, however
however
 some consider famous personalities are at
this
 level of success. In my opinion famous people are successful and why I will explain in following paragraphs.  There are a number of arguments in favour of
this
 stance. The most preponderant
one
 is hard
work
 to achieve name. As it is very easy to spoil reputation by doing only
one
 wrong
work but
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work, but
 it is very difficult to reach
upto
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up to
 that point where everyone become known to you and your personality. Every
work
 is paid so it is not much
hard
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harder
 to earn
money which
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money, which
 is
also
 necessary to live
happy life
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a happy life
happy lives
. Doing something good or with talent always help us to go forward. 
Furthermore
, with hard
work
 to become known in the small town or world
one
 can earn
money
also
.
For
example there
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example, there
 are so many famous actors and actresses who have reputation as well and they are rich
also
, but no
one
 need
money
 from them
just have
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just has
 dreams
to meet
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meet
 them which is a real achievement. In the way of
good qualities
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the good qualities
 of a person,
one
 should be hard working, cooperative, friendly and down to earth. With these characteristics
one
 can earn both fame and
money
. To put
into
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in
nutshell
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a nutshell
, becoming rich only make that person
happy but
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happy, but
 famous people
gives
Suggestion
give
 happiness to so many others and they become ideal for them.

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